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Originally for Leona Lewis NEED HELP WITH 2nd VERSE AND Bridge.. *WITH ME*
Okay so... this track was given to write to with the intention of being submitted to Leona Lewis. Well, it never got referenced cause of some bullnish... but either way... I still would like to get it done.
Attached is the song and the second attachment is the melody with the hook....
If you have any ideas... bring em!
WITH ME
Alicia
The lyrics for the verse and hook are
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Choked up, Broken up, I feel so incomplete
Cause I existed when you lived
And now I'm breathing and you're not here
Stoked up, no more, I feel no energy
God please bring my baby, Bring my baby back down to me...
I am down on prayers knee, tryna hold on to the memories
the thoughts of you were so fond to me
And I will never never never never forget you
(But when I think that all I've got to give)
Hook
When I think that all I've got to give is gone
I hear your voice telling me to be strong, be strong
you say, You'll see me in the end, and you'll love me once again
And now I feel so confident cause you're still here with me
Attached is the song and the second attachment is the melody with the hook....
If you have any ideas... bring em!
WITH ME
Alicia
The lyrics for the verse and hook are
VS 1
Choked up, Broken up, I feel so incomplete
Cause I existed when you lived
And now I'm breathing and you're not here
Stoked up, no more, I feel no energy
God please bring my baby, Bring my baby back down to me...
I am down on prayers knee, tryna hold on to the memories
the thoughts of you were so fond to me
And I will never never never never forget you
(But when I think that all I've got to give)
Hook
When I think that all I've got to give is gone
I hear your voice telling me to be strong, be strong
you say, You'll see me in the end, and you'll love me once again
And now I feel so confident cause you're still here with me
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Softly_bpm_85.mp3, 5.8 MB -
With Me_Hook.wav, 465 KB
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Permalink Reply by ALICIA S. SMITH on -
Thank you Kincie! It's much appreciated. I still need some help with it... I don't want the 2nd verse to sound all sad... so that's why I took a break from it... help please!
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Permalink Reply by ALICIA S. SMITH on
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I won't be able to do that until tomorrow Kincie... my itunes is acting crazy...
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Permalink Reply by TheMovement on -
three words "i like this" it's got a real sincere feeling to it i will get back at you with what i have asap
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Permalink Reply by ALICIA S. SMITH on
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Thanks kompozitionz! Make sure you to get back to this post soon.
Peace & Blessings,
Alicia
kompozitionz said:three words "i like this" it's got a real sincere feeling to it i will get back at you with what i have asap
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Permalink Reply by Jae Enfluwnze on -
Just yesterday, I had deja vu
cuz i could sworn i saw
Someone look just like you
He had your smile
He had your laugh
And my heart began to flutter
Like when you were here with me
Everyday's a reoccuring memory
I can feel your love surrounding me
And i know
I can make it
Cause you still are a part of me
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Permalink Reply by ALICIA S. SMITH on
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Jae-
Can you post your melody to this? A bit thrown off... thanks.
Jae Enfluwnze said:Just yesterday, I had deja vu
cuz i could sworn i saw
Someone look just like you
He had your smile
He had your laugh
And my heart began to flutter
Like when you were here with me
Everyday's a reoccuring memory
I can feel your love surrounding me
And i know
I can make it
Cause you still are a part of me
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Permalink Reply by TheMovement on
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verse:
i can still feel the kiss of your lips
so soft i remember
i can still feel your arms around me
a sanctuary i could always enter
people say its just emtions its all in my mind
but they can't see what i see
you've been like my personal angel
giving me glimpses of heaven every day
every single memory of you
keeps me focused keeps me sane
bridge:
love never stops and i'm living proof
so as long as i live know i'll be loving you
as long as i can keep a piece of you, you can have all of me
when i need you i don't have to look to far
in my heart is where i know you'll be
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Permalink Reply by TheMovement on
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oh i forgot to mention i'll try to put a vocal up by the end of the night. i kind of have alot of irons in the fire
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Permalink Reply by Jae Enfluwnze on
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we gotta either talk on the phone or ill have to wait til i can get a mic for my computer to lay it.
ALICIA S. SMITH said:Jae-
Can you post your melody to this? A bit thrown off... thanks.
Jae Enfluwnze said:Just yesterday, I had deja vu
cuz i could sworn i saw
Someone look just like you
He had your smile
He had your laugh
And my heart began to flutter
Like when you were here with me
Everyday's a reoccuring memory
I can feel your love surrounding me
And i know
I can make it
Cause you still are a part of me
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Permalink Reply by Lynn Danielle Treasure on -
Alicia, I like the instrumental. What's the melody, though using these lyrics? Can you hum it and post it? Otherwise, I'll have to personalize it. Anyhow, give me some time and I'll see what I can come up with.
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