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Syllabus TRack-waited Jack Knight Melody Idea----need Lyrics
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Permalink Reply by Pearl on -
Yes I totally agree... beautiful melody.
Ms. Kirsten said:hey Jack - I dig the melody - very nice ! -
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Permalink Reply by Tina Roberts on -
Quick go at some lyrics before hittin the sack - its late in London!:
v1
I've waited all my life for this feelin
I wanna be sure that I, I'm not dreamin now (Couldn't get much better)
I've waited tables & bars to make ends meet
I stayed at Heartbreak Hotel on Dead End Street, yeah, oh oh...
Ch
Some day, one day, today
Some day, one day, today
I finally figured it out
What life and I'm all about...
thats it for now... lemme know...? T x -
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Permalink Reply by Syllabus on -
The verse has VERY good word play! I must say I AM curious to hear how it all sounds together verse/chorus.
Tina Roberts said:Quick go at some lyrics before hittin the sack - its late in London!:
v1 I've waited all my life for this feelin
I wanna be sure that I, I'm not dreamin now (Couldn't get much better)
I've waited tables & bars to make ends meet
I stayed at Heartbreak Hotel on Dead End Street, yeah, oh oh...
Ch
Some day, one day, today
Some day, one day, today
I finally figured it out
What life and I'm all about...
thats it for now... lemme know...? T x -
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Permalink Reply by Adam Scott on
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Hi...I just put up a very rough demo of what I wrote to "Waited"...It's called "Sunlight"...I have the first verse, the chorus and a bridge section towards the end (I have the last line of that blank still...not sure of where I want to go with it and looking for suggestions!). Let me know what you guys all think so far!
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Permalink Reply by Myles Warden on -
1st first sketch...melody very similar to jacks. let me know what ya'll think...
burberry perfume caught my attention
thru my sean john shades
i could see what i was missing
you had it all
and i wanted you
in my life
(line)
didnt believe in love at first sight
but girl u had my heart the moment u first said
high
and i dont even know why
(line) - Attachments:
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bad boy 1 sketch.mp3, 4.9 MB
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Permalink Reply by Syllabus on
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Adam this is cool. (even though the Vox are only in the left speaker) But I like how you went in a different direction with it. It helps to follow along when you post lyrics though. Very good start though!!
Adam Scott said:Hi...I just put up a very rough demo of what I wrote to "Waited"...It's called "Sunlight"...I have the first verse, the chorus and a bridge section towards the end (I have the last line of that blank still...not sure of where I want to go with it and looking for suggestions!). Let me know what you guys all think so far! -
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Permalink Reply by Syllabus on
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Myles man, GREAT use of Imagery! I can see a scene painted with your words...Now where would you take it from here?? Are we talkin' about a "Slow Down" Bobby V. type of song?? Let's get imaginitive! Keep it going! Very good submission, don't stop!
Myles Warden said:1st first sketch...melody very similar to jacks. let me know what ya'll think...
burberry perfume caught my attention
thru my sean john shades
i could see what i was missing
you had it all
and i wanted you
in my life
(line)
didnt believe in love at first sight
but girl u had my heart the moment u first said
high
and i dont even know why
(line) -
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Permalink Reply by Myles Warden on
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Thanks. Def. thinking something in the "slow down" direction but im not sure what the "catch" should be ya know. Feel free to help out everyone! lol.
Syllabus said:Myles man, GREAT use of Imagery! I can see a scene painted with your words...Now where would you take it from here?? Are we talkin' about a "Slow Down" Bobby V. type of song?? Let's get imaginitive! Keep it going! Very good submission, don't stop!
Myles Warden said:1st first sketch...melody very similar to jacks. let me know what ya'll think...
burberry perfume caught my attention thru my sean john shades i could see what i was missing you had it all
and i wanted you
in my life
(line)
didnt believe in love at first sight
but girl u had my heart the moment u first said
high
and i dont even know why
(line) -
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Permalink Reply by Myles Warden on
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Myles Warden said:Thanks. Def. thinking something in the "slow down" direction but im not sure what the "catch" should be ya know. Feel free to help out everyone! lol.
Syllabus said:Myles man, GREAT use of Imagery! I can see a scene painted with your words...Now where would you take it from here?? Are we talkin' about a "Slow Down" Bobby V. type of song?? Let's get imaginitive! Keep it going! Very good submission, don't stop!
Myles Warden said:1st first sketch...melody very similar to jacks. let me know what ya'll think...
burberry perfume caught my attention thru my sean john shades i could see what i was missing you had it all
and i wanted you
in my life
(line)
didnt believe in love at first sight
but girl u had my heart the moment u first said
high
and i dont even know why
(line) -
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Thanks for the feedback, Syllabus...I will definitely revise the mix, have the vocals EQ'd and make it listenable from both speakers next time...lol
Here are the lyrics:
(Verse 1)
My mind is racing so fast
My heart cant keep up.
It's almost 4 in the morning,
The night just creeps up, oh.
My eyes keep closing, exhausted.
I had a plan but I lost it.
Every time and again,
I tried to talk to her.
I keep on losing my cool
By the time I walk to her.
At this rate I'm going,
I will never live out the fantasy
I've got deep in my mind.
(Chorus)
Sunlight.
I'll just wait for sunlight.
Maybe I'll feel better.
Then I'll be able to focus
On how to make you notice me.
Wait for sunlight.
I'll just wait for sunlight.
'til then I'll be dreamin'
'bout how to make you my lady,
And make you call me your baby.
(Bridge)
Now I know,
That one day, we'll be together.
Fate is in my hands.
I'll wait for you patiently.
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Syllabus said:Adam this is cool. (even though the Vox are only in the left speaker) But I like how you went in a different direction with it. It helps to follow along when you post lyrics though. Very good start though!!
Adam Scott said:Hi...I just put up a very rough demo of what I wrote to "Waited"...It's called "Sunlight"...I have the first verse, the chorus and a bridge section towards the end (I have the last line of that blank still...not sure of where I want to go with it and looking for suggestions!). Let me know what you guys all think so far! -
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Permalink Reply by Jack Knight on -
when can i hear it????
Myles Warden said:Myles Warden said:Thanks. Def. thinking something in the "slow down" direction but im not sure what the "catch" should be ya know. Feel free to help out everyone! lol.
Syllabus said:Myles man, GREAT use of Imagery! I can see a scene painted with your words...Now where would you take it from here?? Are we talkin' about a "Slow Down" Bobby V. type of song?? Let's get imaginitive! Keep it going! Very good submission, don't stop!
Myles Warden said:1st first sketch...melody very similar to jacks. let me know what ya'll think...
burberry perfume caught my attention thru my sean john shades i could see what i was missing you had it all
and i wanted you
in my life
(line)
didnt believe in love at first sight
but girl u had my heart the moment u first said
high
and i dont even know why
(line) -
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